Oh... this is so sad, and so true... it was so perfect though, it flowed well, and though your vocabulary was simple, it fit the poem.
5/5
gabriella
xoxos

This was really sad...
the ending really got me...
i like the repetition of "nothing but a child", it really fits here...
this is really a nice poem, the flow is great and the message of it was told in a wonderful way...
5/5
*isabel*

Wow!..sad really sad...and sos so true...very well written...i loved the choice of words..simple yet had a great effect on the poem...n i loved the title repeating...it gave a better look to the beauty of the poem..
All in all...Great job!
easy 5/5=)
xxPoojaxx

Your structure - amazing.
I loved how you made each stanza work, yet always using "nothing but a child".
Was a really thought out poem.

It was sad, yet sweet.
Well done.

"Everything starts like a fairy tale;
With a craziness you submit yourself with lust.
You cannot think that time you are just,
Nothing but a child."

My favourite stanza.
I liked it because it shows that even when things start out like in the movies, reality will always kick in.

Good job on this one dear =]

This has got to be the best poem i've read in along time. it was very thoroughly thought out and very touching. i'm very much impressed.

L.x

I've just read it again. you write very naturally and whilst everything's structured, your words don't feel forced or over-complicated. it's nice to read something so organic. i agree with the comments above too, it's very sad, yet strangely comforting. If this is apersonal experience, i take my hat off to you for being brave enough to write about something so personal to you.

L.x

Powerfull poem.. amazed me.. keep it up

It's really sad and pretty, I didn't understand it that much, but that's probably my fault haha. It's kinda loud in my living room where I'm reading this, so that might be why. But I still thought it was good.

~*Alex*~

Omg! thats really sad. did that happen to your mother? jw.
i love how you repeated the line nothing but a child in every stanza.
i would deff give this a 5/5

xo kisses xo

Powerful and poetic- certainly in a very unique way :). The cause of repetition aids in the effectiveness of this piece, creating a melancholy atmosphere for the reader. A solid write, very well done :).

Hey Laura how you been? Great poem and your use of repetition always works well. It was sad and the emotion was felt throughout.
cheers, josh

Tis an excellent kyrielle, and the repition line is great, love the rhyme scheme, i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming!!

Wow such a sensitive, powerful poem 5/5 keep writing!

I quite like this poem but at times it was a bit...unstructured, i found myself stuttering as i tried to read it, which may just be me reading it wrong! I loved the way you repeteted "nothing but a child" i thought that was really effective. and the tone of the poem is very clear, which i loved. You can really feel the emotion when you're reading it. =]
Geo

Aww It's very touching. Even though you make it sound like children are not important.. Or It's just me understanding everything wrongly. And also it's strangely comforting. The repetition was great. Just touching a soft subject what makes this poem so amazing.
Keep writing. :)
5/5

A very poignant write, indeed. You successfully have pulled off a refrain of a Kyrielle which depicts a different event from the preceding one/s. I liked it. =] A provocative piece, nonetheless. 'twas a joy to read.

The reption of nothing but a child was really really good, it blew me away, the word choice was simple yet effective, and the emtion was heartfelt and powerful, Such a sad thing to give your husband to death, well written, 5/5 although in my opion it deserves more. keep up the good work.

Wow, great job! the flow was really good and worked well with the poem the rhyming was very nice but i have one little thing, boss and was dont rhym.. at least not to me.. but nonetheless great job!!

I liked how you had some rhyming but not to much. The flow was very good and I loved the strong words you used. I gave this poem a 5/5.

This is heartbreaking to read and yet so beautifully written at the same time.
A gripping read, flawless flow and a stunning ending.
I thought you managed to write about something very sad elegantly and touchingly.