Comments : To someone i loved

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    This is a great poem, I know the pain your talking about and although it hurts now, in time you'll realize that somebody out there will offer you so much more. In time she'll realize what she lost and you'll have long forgotten about it. Excellent job good flow 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    Aww this is a sad poem, i can really feel your emotion through each line.my favorite part was:"you left me lonely like we never loved at all, I couldn't tell you how many times i just waited by the phone hoping you'd call" keep it up...5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This is really great. Loved the long lines each one held such strong powerful emotions of which you portrayed beautifully. your word choice amazing. I found this poem to be so heartfelt Im sure many others can feel your pain. Well done on this ~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Wow!..it's a beautifully penned poem...
    Every line held so many powerful emotions which was supported by excellent word choice...It's sad and touching,yet nice

    Kp up the good job!

    5/5
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Numb Handed

    Wow, this im my life in a nut shell. /clap

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Alright.
    I want you to know the pain you put me through,
    That was very cliched.
    Maybe you could word it differently?

    I know we had problems[[,]] but they were nothing we couldn't have worked through,
    You said "through" twice in a row.
    The row was kind of ruined.

    I couldn't tell you how many times i just waited by the phone hoping you'd call
    That line was very forced.

    Umm...
    Okay.
    I have to say my dear.
    And I do apologize.
    But I don't realy like your poem all that much.
    It lacks structure, grammar, and flow.

    All in all,
    I'm going to say that I'll have to give it a 4.

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    It was a good poem. It was a little short but it was still ok. Umm, I think that the flow was a little off but it isn't so bad that you couldn't fix it. I gave this poem a 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Anaisthitos

    I'm going to be honest. The emotion was good, the subject was good. However, I think you could definitely improve. In areas like flow and word choice, I think you should revise those areas. I also think you should break it up into stanzas and lines. The emotion throughout the poem was good, and it was all very relate able. Not bad. I did enjoy reading it, but I'd enjoy it much more with better flow and format. Overall, I give it 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by broken reflection

    Aw sadly sweet
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    Great job, it was a sad story but really well written I actually like your style of writing

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Awwwz this was such a sad but very well written poem!! keep it up! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by noha

    Waw, its so great poem
    you got great talent to write like this,so simple and full of feeling,that deep feeling of love and pain.
    i got your point and its right how to love someone and left him ,thats not right but it happend ,well done 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Nicole

    I like this one as well.
    Itz great.
    good job! =]

  • 15 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    Awe , thats really cute . I think that if you cut it up it would be easier to get into the flow of it , but otherwise it was really awesome .

    I know we had problems but theirs nothing we couldn't have worked through,

    "thiers" should be there's , just a little thing I've noticed

  • 15 years ago

    by HvN

    I can definitley relate man, great job here, keep up the good work! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    Nicely written.. very expressive. 5/5