Hey, this is a great poem, i like the way you end it! one suggestion though, why dont you try splitting it into stanzas it will make it easier to read. but it is really good well done! keep up the good work

Emma
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"you would always [com] and watch" - come.

This piece endears me exceedingly. It is, in fact, a piece which I could effortlessly correlate with. I feel for you, dear. Even if it was rather difficult to let go, I admire the fortitude and strength of your character in this work.

My pleasure to read, nonetheless. I hope you all the best and take care. 5/5

Debbie

Another beautiful poem, i loved it. great job once again.

Wow, it was nicely penned. it would be much better to read if it was structured in 4 line stanza's, but over all i loved it 5/5
your smile, your eyes
have left a mark in my heart
my fave lines^^

Wonderfully written friendship, your choice of words is great through the whole piece, and it's written very emotionally.
5/5

Aww this so sweet great emotion and flow keep it up

laura

I thought it was good
a great friendship poem

i loved the emotion and the
word choices

a well deserved

5/5

Now this piece, Much better. I truely found this to be beautiful. Touching and heartfelt. A pleasure to read. Althought the only think I found that needs changing is not capitalizing your "I's" other then that a great poem. Well done~mel

Beautiful penned tribute to a friend, yet well expressed emotions you portray here, with friend would be great, with loved one would be be wonderful, but without them it would be like (Beach without Sand) Beautiful written!

That was a lovely poem!

But i agree with emma, try dividing them into equal lines. It could help "smoothen" the flow a bit more...

overall, the vocab and emotion was great in the entire piece. gratz on a job well done! :)

Great work yet again, the flow and emotion within was great. Keep it up.

Peace, Joe

Very good poem had alot of emotion 5/5

I like the poem. The flow was moderate.

Good job, however...

You must work on your grammar and punctuation mate. This is my true honest opinion, ad comas and periods! Put capital letters where they belong!

I can not under any circumstances give you a five with all those grammar and punctuation mistakes.

It was your 'Very best'. It's good, not excellent. What else... ah that's right. You must work on higher vocabulary! Work on really amazing vocabulary. Like... Desolated, or Tenebrous. ect, cetera.

I simply ADORE words like that, and maybe put the definition at the bottom so if the reader doesn't understand the word, they will now!

See? Get a dictionary and a thesaurus and master your words to your fullest potential!!

It's a good poem. No doubt.

[Voted 4]

_Sam