Comments : Forever yours [Acrostic]

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Love is definately the best feeling of all and nothing can make you feel more alive then love. The poem was written well and it flowed well also, the imagery was great and so was the word choice. I thought the ending lines were perfect 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    So beautiful..........................really greatly done.

    God bless u

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    I adore this Acrostic. Unfortunately, Love is beyond my limited knowledge at the moment. I am quite inexperienced on the said subject; so then I cannot give coherent remarks. Nevertheless, when you stated this line, "Rainbow of my love is shown in your eyes" it gave me hope that perhaps love, like the rainbow after the rain, can add more vibrant colours in my world :). Nice work, nonetheless. 'twas my joy to read it. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    On the ways of this life
    That doesn't sound right for some reason.
    I don't know why...

    Staying with you, I am forever yours
    Love that.

    All in all, dear.
    I have to say, it was okay.

    It would've been better if you added punctuation in your poetry.
    But still, 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. i love this poem.. its fantastic.. the imagery and the emotion is written so beautifully.. usually acrostics sound forced because of the structure used but this poem flowed and fit together very nicely.. great job :D!

  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    Im normally not a big fan of acrostic poems because the words are forced..well I actually do like your acrostic poem, the words dont sound forced and the flow is good, only one thing didn't sound completely right and that is: On the ways of this life..I'm not sure why, maybe you could replace 'this' with 'my' then you get: On the ways of my life.. but futher more its awesome.
    nice work 5/5
    kisses stephanie

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    Omg i gave you a 5/5. it was awesome. i loved it. it was sweet and deep and you could really tell that it came from your heart.
    these 2 are my favorite lines in the poem. it was great.

    Real love looks like a red rose
    Staying with you, I am forever yours

    Yours eyes attract me to live with you
    Openness of your heart makes me romantic

  • 16 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    Great job!!!!! :], i loved this poem. i liked the description you used and the flow was great as well. good job. this poem made me very happy when i read it and i really enjoyed it. great job 5/5 :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Hassan
    Nice job on your first Acrostic. Keep writing.
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    This poem is awesome.. I wonder who the lucky lady was you wrote it for ;). I loved the flow and I think you should keep writing acrostics, you seem to have alot of talent. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    Raising the love on those ways
    ^ "ways" is not the right word for this. Mabye use "paths"?

    Every part of my heart sings song
    ^ There should be an "a" before "song".

    Yours eyes attract me to live with you
    ^ It should be "your".

    Awh, I thought this was really sweeet. And although it did have quite a few grammer mistakes I liked the ideas you had and the metaphors. The last stanza had particularly beautiful imagery. Fix up the grammer and it will be perfect. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    So cute poem. Really hope you share it with the person it is written to:). Beautiful imagery and it was simply so sweet. You emotions in it are very clear and deep. Amazing poem.
    5/5
    Keep up the great work! :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    Aww! Such a sweet poem. It really shows your love for this person. Acrostics can be quite difficult to write sometimes, but this is very well written. The last line really tied it all together. An enjoyable read. Well done. =] 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by Meme

    Ur poem is amazin
    gd job :)
    I hope u read n comment my poemss 2

  • 16 years ago

    by Breeeezie

    Aww thats awsome!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is beautiful...wonderfully written with great emotion and depth, I found the whole piece to be very sweet and moving.
    Flow was good throughout and the imagery you portrayed was beautifully done.

  • 16 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Once more a really touching peice of writing. I can feel the emotion your displaying in this peace. It works well. I liked how you described love, and how you feel about it. Love poems intrest me becuase to be honest im not even sure love exists so reading them makes me wonder. Its good you put in red rose as it is a simbel of love but it is a little cliche as well. To improve your writing i suggest you use punctuation. It coould help your work as the reader reads the poem the way you want it to be read. Keep writing! xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Wow that was really sweet. The ending was superb :) I love it! Flow was smooth, good choice of words.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    I always love the concept of an acrostic poem..namely because theres few rules to it with respect to rhyming..some actually do find that difficult..evidently you didnt, because it turned out amazing..keep up the great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    This poem is really beautifully written. Atmosphere is great, wording is also excellent. It is short but very powerful. It really deserves 5/5