Tis a very good and sad love poem goran, love the flow, i give it a 5/5 as always!!! keep them coming!!!

Set me free,
I don't believe in love,
Set me free,
So I could fly,
Like a white dove.

^^I really really loved these lines..it's so pure..so powerful..yet simple

The repetition "set me free" really gave a great impact on the emotions portrayed.

I don't want to beloved
As love is a fire,
I don't want to be burned.
Set me free,
I am tired.
^^so beautiful "as love is a fire"...great choice of words...simple yet wonderful...very well written..

I liked the idea of writing something about"not wanting love"...mm..different..I loved it anyways

=)
5/5...Great job as always
xxPoojaxx

Awww. the image of the white dove at the end was magnificant =] perfect way to end it. Also, the layout of this poem fits perfectly with what you are saying in the poem. Its quick, with short sentences and emphasises how you want to "let go" or how you want the lover to "let go". I loved it, well done =]
Geo
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Haha. i enjoyed this one goran. i love reading your poems because it inspires me, even if i never finish the poem. ><

hmm. let's see...
some parts rhymed but others didnt. keep that consistent, it helps the flow.
some of the repeating lines just didnt sound as good.
and the dove part just a little cliche.

to help:
Set me free,
I am not a lover.
Set me free,
I don't want you
Set me free,
I don't love you.

with the lines ending in "you" change them to words ending in -er, i think then it would sound better.

then, as for the last stanza,

Set me free,
I don't believe in love,
Set me free,
So I could fly,
Like a white dove.

maybe somethingl ike this:
set me free,
i don't believe in love,
set me free,
free as a dove.

maybe. its al up to you.

-kitty

I liked how you said

Set me free,
I don't want you
Set me free,
I don't love you.

Because I have been in a relationship like that. Me feeling tward him just weren't there anymore. I liked this poem for that and because it has a great flow. The word choice was also wonderful. I gave this poem a 5/5.

Beautiful. Just amazing. Been in that kind of relationship so touching, bringing back memories. A bit rough but like it just needs to be that way for it to end. I simply love this poem.
5/5

Dearie i loved it, yet again, as always. it was brilliant, ha i finally found a new adjective for your poems, brilliant! i hope you're feeling better.

Yesterday i was on phone with a member of P&Q who live n cali, he asked me who is the best poet i told him Goran Rahim. he asked me why, i told him i dont know but he is the one who i wait for to write any word, while we were speaking he went on his labtop to read ur poems, and then he said, shela i have to agree with you, he touches everyone because he go inside a person's heart to express the feelings while other just write what they see.
after reading this poem, i smiled again.lol
because i remembered what he said, (you write what you feel while others write what they see)
Goran this poem is another accomplish. keep it up dear.

I liked the pushing here..You give reasons to the girl that you don't want to be loved

And ahem...beloved:be loved...Or was it just how i thought?
The flow was so fluidy and makes you want more

Keep it up like always goran
Sincerely,
Laura

An almost harsh poem, yet I enjoyed it a lot. It's so different from other poems, all about love and wanting it. I like the metaphor's etc that you used. The flow was good and the rhyming didn't sound too forced. A good write. 5/5

Tammie

"As love is a fire,
I don't want to be burned.
Set me free,
I am tired..."

Those lines seemed to have struck an arrow through my heart for some unknown reasons. Perhaps it is because I can correlate with the situation. In which case, I adore the theme you used in this piece, as always. Entreating freedom from an unwanted love is one of the most difficult things that I can master. Even now, I still couldn't let go of the one I first loved, ehh. But I'm really glad for your courage. (^^,) You're such an inspiration! wonderful work. Keep on writing what you feel and like. all the best and take care. ~Debbie

You repeated a lot of the same words but it was still good and it hard a great flow. the message was straight forward. Good job. I liked it. 5/5

Wow - so many things to read into in that poem... Whether this person in the poem acutally doesn't love this other person, or if he/she is pushing that person away because they are afraid to love and dont want someone getting too close in case they should fall for them and have to let their heart crack open... well - that is what I saw in it anyway! :)

Thanks for the read

Mo :)

A lot of people have quoted these lines, but I can definitely see why; they're brilliant.

"I don't want to beloved
As love is a fire,
I don't want to be burned.
Set me free,
I am tired."

^ I ADORE those lines. Excellent, my dear.

Ah gee, this was so full of love and hurt, well that is how i found it, how i read it.

all i can now suggest is a use of more longer and not used words in your poem.

but still 5/5 from me, David

I liked this write, the second stanza really struck me. i can relate to this in some ways, but not entirely. i would like to think that love is more than a game. but then again. love is strange. if at all there is a such thing called love anyhow.
good work man, good work.

OH tis is sad!me want to cry now! dast xosh

Really great flow loved the feeling to it over all just amazing really great work what else can i say 5/5 from me

I sure would hate to find that poem in my locker! haha.. You have a lot of poems about love and they all are good. my the way i added you as a favorite. You give good comments. thanks! 5/5