Party Time (Double Tyburn)

by Brittany C   Jun 11, 2007


Laughing
Joking
Playing
Singing
Bent from hard laughing, joking fun.
Everyone is playing, singing loud.

Running
Hiding
Drinking
Smiling
Kids chasing, hiding anywhere.
Adults talking; smiling for hours.

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Tyburn consist six lines consisting 2,2,2,2,9,9 syllables
the 5 line incorporates the first and second lines and the 6th line incorporates the third and fourth lines.

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  • 18 years ago

    by hani

    Hi
    very nice and beautiful poem 5/5 .
    and i'll appreciate your vote and comment for my poems
    hani

  • 18 years ago

    by Wallace

    Nice form of poetry never seen it before.

  • 18 years ago

    by Cody r

    Itis good. i have never heard this kind of poem before. some of the lines were not 9 syllables. some were ten

  • 18 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    nice tyburn, only one thing is wrong, the last two lines should be 9 syllables, but when I was counting the syllables and there are 11 instead of 9, so if you could change that, then it perfect, still i will give you 5/5,
    kisses stephanie

  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Hm.
    Interesting.
    I never liked Tyburns, but your's isn't bad at all.
    Very creative.
    A little random; noncliche. Haha. Good. =]

    I didn't enjoy the topic, but I liked that you did try and .. I'm not sure how to explain it. It's good, though.

    Let's see.
    One complaint.
    "Little kids chasing running, hiding anywhere.
    Grownups talking drinking, smiling for hours."
    [[How about punctuation:
    "Little kids chasing{,} running, hidding anywhere.
    Grownups talking{,} drinking{;} smiling for hours."

    =] Nicely done.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

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