This one was really great =) You got the point and the feelings across so good =) The flow was a little hard to find at first but after I found it...Wow lols Your choice of words was really great on this one also =) 5/5 =D
Rhea

Good poem i think the spelling/grammer needs a little work but other than that its really gud!! its full of emotion and feeling
5/5
luv Fallen