OH I really liked this, the opening was powerful and dragged me right into the poem, with it getting better and better from there.
Beautiful.

This poem was quite touching and heartfelt. I loved the word choice each one was deep and powerful portrayed such amazing emotions. Although I prefer when the structure is formed together neater, I read your profile and it says you don't always have structure and so on so I kept it in mind. Altogether a good piece. well done.~mel