Hey this is really very nicely done...
full of real feelings.Loved it!!!
5/5

God bless u

Hassan
Nice job. Your love shines in your words. With each poem you write you are getting better and better :)
Take care my friend.
Cindy

I liked this poem even though i dont read love poems that often. The flow of it was good, and the rhymes oddly worked. The secound stanza wasnt as good as the first though. I liked how you started the peom with an alliteration of; "Lasting love" it worked well and it was a good idea for an opening of a poem. This line;

"Every tear looks like a heavy rain"

i think should be "Every tear looks like heavy rain". Becuase i odnt know how every tear can look like A heavy rain. Overall an emotional and heartfelt read. Keep writing! xx

Okay, finally I'm commenting. =]
I think this is pretty good all around. Acrostics are definately not the easiest to write. There is a lot of emotion expressed and the overall comparisons and metaphor's, so to speak, were well written.
I do have some critique though. These are just a few from the second stanza:
"Happiness are going away from my life"
to me, should be
Happiness is going away from my life

"Remaining part of my story is becoming hide"
Although you wrote hide to rhyme, it doesn't make sense it should be hid.

Just some of the rhyming sounded a bit forced, but other than that, I think this was pretty good. Well done. =]

Tammie

Very beautiful poem but sad. I wish we can write happy poem when we are in good mood. Hey, thanks for commenting my poem, "Lies". =] 5/5

This voice of lonely heart is going for suicide
^^^
ilove that line. its so sad, and i just love the way it sounds =]
overall, the poems really good, i enjoyed the acrostic style, and although they are not usually rhyming, your rhymes made it better! a beautiful piece of poetry, i dont understand the low votes. 5/5 for sure!
nuf luv xx

Great technique and wording, really showed how well you can write differently, well done.

5/5 David

I was fairly disenchanted by the poem's ending; it wasn't as strong as the others. Nevertheless, I do believe that you've written a fine piece of work in regards to Love. In fact, the emotions emanated by your words made this poem spectacular and delightful to read as well. Nicely done!

Best wishes,
Marian

I really liked this, but at the same time, the fact that most of the piece rhymed and then didn't at the end threw me off.
I loved the metaphor you used in this piece, it added to the effect very nicely.

Another excellent poem of yours. I like both stanzas very much. You wrote this piece excellently. Ending is great. You described emotions amazingly. 5/5

Beautiful poem by you BUT I think you are wrong when you think others won't understand your pain. The feeling of grieve over losing a beloved one is universal.

take care, my friend

5/5 Ingrid