Wow. that is really good. the rhythm is really good. I wouldn't change a thing. 5/5

I liked can't say anything needs to be changed or relooked at.... i makes me think alot i don't know why but it just does. really good feel to it and flow 5/5

Ouu very nice, i like the idea of this. The ending was a good surprise twist:)

I loved this poem so much

i mean the ending was unexpected
but it fit in there

very nice job

5/5

Beautiful ending!

It really caught me by surprise and finished the poem off well. Each write I have read from you, is different in every way which makes it refreshing and a joy to read.

Well done *5/5*

Another great poem i love this one too...my fave part is when you said you found out that you had
"Guilt" and "passion"
in my left and right hand.that was awesome!! great work!!