Comments : Am i pretty enough now? (very sad)

  • 16 years ago

    by sweetiepie18

    So sad but extremely well written! keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by beautiful xx disaster

    This is so sad but amazing at the same time
    wow. youre so talented.
    keep it up.
    <3jess

  • 16 years ago

    by cAKE

    THIS IS REALLY SAD OMG BUT ITS SUCH A GOOD POEM SWEETHEART KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK REALLY WELL THOUGHT

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    I really loved this piece for flow and message and just the complete package was well executed you should be very proud of this work. The story line was great and you kept with the theme through out it great job Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by helena

    Thats really sad but its amazing

  • 16 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Wow. :(...makes me want to cry.
    Excellent poem, really makes you think inna.

    Keep it up && thanks for the comment.

    P.S. I hope you don't feel like doing what is said in this poem. Always remember that no matter how ugly you think you are, that special person that loves you believes you're the most beautiful and irresistible thing on earth, and nothing can ever change that && that special person is going to walk into your life unexpectedly but change it tremendosly.

    Take care!

  • 16 years ago

    by Delirium

    Wow!it was so sad but Written really good!I hope you continue to wright like this!

  • 16 years ago

    by unblue skye

    Verry sad but wow! it was great! it kept meh reading the whole thing!!! 5/5 all i can say ish wow...o.o

    ~*~Skye~*~

  • 16 years ago

    by I love David Fennell

    I love this poem ...my favorite..keep da good working come kid...

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Omg...that is so sad...beautiful poem though....keep up the good work! Loved it!

  • 16 years ago

    by gack60

    Wow! this is a really sad piece, i dont usually like reading about self harm n stuff but this one gripped me.
    The structure was good although i thought the flow was a bit off, also i noticed a few spelling mistakes which can easily be sorted.

    Overall a wicked piece! so much depth and feeling.

    5/5

    Well done

    Gary

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I=I

    "she fell to her knees
    and was so confused
    he got what he wanted from her
    she fly gutted and used"

    ^^Fly??

    "floating amounts the flood"

    ^^Amongst?

    In all honesty, I found this poem to be completely cliche. The whole ''girl gets hurt by a guy, cuts herself, kills herself yada yada yada, has been done so many times that it gets kind of old.

    However, the imagery you portrayed in this was beautifully done, it created very vivid pictures in my mind.

    I thought the flow was okay for the most part but there were a couple of places where it was kind of shaky.

    I thought ''she'' was repeated way to many times, towards the end of the poem it was kind of irritating.

    I liked the repetition of ''Am I pretty enough now?'' I thought that made for a very powerful effect on the overall piece.

    You might want to add some punctuation in the piece, it looks kind of sloppy without any at all.

    I thought that this was a lot longer than needed to tell the story behind the words, by the end of the piece it just felt like it was dragging on.

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Omg...that was so sad and amazingly written...i feel like that too....amazing poem! I tottally loved it...5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow. now that was long. i loved it. thought it was great, but it's very sad and i have a tear in my eyes. i love the repetitveness of this piece. and it was truly amazing, nicely penned sad piece

  • 16 years ago

    by A l y s s a

    Wow, that was amazing. i was captured right till the end. (gret ending by the way.) i loved the repetition. Great poem!

    Ally. x

  • 16 years ago

    by Tiffany

    This was beautiful. keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Mackenzie

    Amazing... i almost cryed... u have a great talent! keep it up! im so amazed.. i swear! 5/5 all the way!

  • 16 years ago

    by halie

    I loved it
    thats wat i feel like doing rite now
    i loved it
    5/5
    :]
    great poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    This was very well written. Although it was a little too long, it held my attention the whole time! The flow was good, the word choice was great, and the concept was amazing! 5/5

  • Wow this is one of the BEST poems i've ever read. I'm at almost a complete loss for words. This poem is very sad and has so much emotion. Keep up the great work!! Definitally a 5/5!!