Comments : Daddy hurt mummy.

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    "Daddy locked us in our rooms and told us all goodnight, i heard mummy screaming, but couldn't reach the light."

    I liked this one because it seemed so innocent to a childs eyes yet so sad because no one should go though this.
    I think you could do better in your lay out though with your poems.
    Maybe like this?

    "Daddy locked us in our rooms
    And told us all goodnight
    I heard mummy screaming
    But I couldn't reach the light."

    Just a thought =)
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by xXxBrOkEnAnGeLxXx

    Wow thats a realli good poem.
    no one should have to go thru that and i have alot of respect for u to be so brave about it now.
    well done 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by jason

    Wow yes i must say you are a really good poet... alot better then some of the other poems i have read before = ]

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney

    Oh my gosh. You were right. I love this poem. That's terrible really. I hope things are better now.
    Keep your head high.
    Great piece!

  • 16 years ago

    by hani

    Very nice and beutifull you have a great talent keep it up
    hani

  • That one nearly made me cry.
    I'm sorry if this really happened.

    Good poem. The emotion was shown and it flowed well.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by my name is Llama

    I hope to god that this isn't true but if it is my thoughts r with you. i especially liked the last line. it really summed up the mood of the poem. good work xoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by sweetiepie18

    Excellent work, you are really gifted, keep writing and never let your talent go to waste!
    x

  • 16 years ago

    by That One Girl

    I agree with all of them^ wow that is so sad!!!! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by That One Girl

    I hope that isnt true! god that is so sad!

  • 15 years ago

    by Jade

    AMAZING!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Excellent poem, gave me goosebumps. it was good because the subject is very touching and you made it flow steady for the reader to carry on til the end. the language use was understood as a childs point of view which adds to the emotion of the poem.

    well done on this. x