Yes we do dear, you have done a greater job here. keep it up

a 5/5 as you really deserve it

I like this poem...I really do.. I just find on part disterbing...
"Everyone's equal there; everyone's the same
Everyone's got the same style, same name."
... I don't like the idea of being the same as anyone else...also, sorry that I didn't comment back sooner...I wasn't feeling all that well...w/e great job 5/5

"a place with no hate, religion, or race.
Everyone's equal there; everyone's the same
Everyone's got the same style, same name.""

I love those lines..
You describe paradise perfectly.. ^^
I wish there are places like that in this world. ^^
Nice poem...
keep writing... ^^
5/5

Oooh... that's beautiful. I love love love this poem. You're totally right. A lot of people will be able to relate to it. At first I was a bit confused by the "paradise". I was kindof wondering why you thought conformity was so great.. XD good thing I kept reading!

Your writting style is interesting i really like keep up the good work.

It's beautiful Tara, I loved it. You had me going there when I was reading it, but then you quickly turned "Paradise" into a joke, and found paradise in writing. Great twist, and I get you the whole way!

Between this and "Phantom," you are now my fav poetess ^_^

Keep it way up!

With love,
~Richi~

I wished to read more about how you've visualized a Paradise, whereas I did enjoy the little twist you created at the latter portion of this work. It's a fine success for a thoughtful poem. Keep on writing! I hope you all the best and take care. 5/5

Marian

This is a good poem =] Enjoyed every line ^^ Keep up the good writing.
xxx

Beautiful penned, even though simply but you express them within beautiful emotions....

"Don't be afraid to learn. Knowledge is weightless, a treasure you can always carry easily."

It was such a nice poem. 5/5.

Absolutelty stunning! a beautiful poem! well done!
5/5
.x

This was a VERY good poem. the only thing i would tweak in it is this...

"our paradise are just a joke" should either change to "our paradises are just a joke" or "our paradise is just a joke". the second one sounds the best in my opinion, but both make more sense gramatically.

but, i gotta say... you definately get 5/5 for this one.

Wow, cute one..I like it

This poem is excellent. 5/5
-vino

Tara this is beautiful poety. well written and well penned. Keep up the good work.

Interesting and original ideas. There were some parts that, in my view, disrupted the flow. Otherwise good stuff :D

I love it! And it's so true the idea of a paridise is just that and idea. It can never be honest!

I liked this poem a lot.Its really good.Well written.Keep up the good work.

We all have certain things that make us happy no matter how low were feeling, I know I have my only little paradise. I think it's important to get away from life's crazy ways even if only for a little while. Excellent job 5/5 GG23

Wow what a great poem. it was a very different topic so i really liked it a lot. it's also a very true poem so good job with that.
keep on writing 5/5

~Kristina