SenseS

by TaNyabAbEE   Jun 22, 2007


Listen to the sound of breeze,
blowing softly through the trees.
See the petals floating through the air,
your breathe tickles through my hair.

Feel your hand entwined with mine,
there's no distance, no more time.
With the crickets chirping in our ears,
life is perfect, cause you are here.

Hear the stream go trickling by,
know for sure you won't make me cry.
Feel the sun warm up our face,
know your lips are what I'll taste.

Feel my heart beat next to yours,
our love will heal all open sores.
Hear the bullfrogs near the stream,
knowing it's just you and me.

*not sure if it's finished or not. if u have any ideas on what else i can add, let me know! thanks*

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  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    I adore this piece. I'm unsure if the slang word 'thru' was intended (I prefer 'through'), whereas the scenery your words portrayed is so gorgeous. It was, in fact, written and presented rather well and sound. The overall diction and flow of words were terrific. As a result, on the whole, I give you my props for writing such a fantastic piece. ~Marian