Comments : Beneath

  • 13 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Nice flow, it's short but beautifully written.
    "Beneath my skin
    What will you see?
    A spark of hatred
    Yearning to breathe" - my favorite stanza.
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    It was short and so sad....I liked the expressions here and there and they made the poem wonderful but Its:It's or it is
    And my fave lines are;

    Heart beating,
    cold as stone

    Keep it up
    Laura

  • 13 years ago

    by David

    This was excellent. the emotion and hurt present in this poem was superb.

    5/5 David

  • 13 years ago

    by nikki

    Thought it was nicely penned. you did a wonderful job. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This was quite a short piece it flowed nicely holding deep emotions which you portrayed within depth. The flow seemed almost chat wise very good in my eyes. The poem was intensely sad yet eerie and dark which I love about it. You have portrayed a beautiful dark piece right here. Well done ~mel

  • 13 years ago

    by Reminders Torture

    It was a short poem but yet sad and deep.The flow was very well done!!!Nice poem dear!!
    Best wishes
    And take care.

  • 13 years ago

    by Beautifully Nothing

    Short, sad, to the point. please keep writing, you are doing an amazing job! kudos for you <3

  • 13 years ago

    by Debbie

    "Beneath my skin
    What will you see?
    A spark of hatred
    Yearning to breathe"

    ~

    I adored the aforementioned stanza. The whole piece endears to me completely. It was truly a poignant write which produced strong and powerful emotions between the lines. I think you did a nice job with this heartrending piece. Nicely done. 5/5 ~Debbie

  • 13 years ago

    by Birgit

    Wow! Nice poem =] I love the short lines, cause they are so powerfull! Keep up the good work.
    xxx

  • 13 years ago

    by Emma

    This was really good i loved it! nice job!

  • 13 years ago

    by firexdancer

    This was also good, though very short and contained, it was very strong and brilliant to me. 5/5
    gabriella

  • 13 years ago

    by Spirit

    "Lie in bed
    Think of you
    Holding on
    Its Nothing new"

    my favorite line
    great job
    5/5
    Sam Mayo

  • 13 years ago

    by ABake

    Wow. This poem was short yet the emotion was strong.
    That was beautiful and the flow was almost perfect!
    great job!
    5/5
    ((Amber))