Nice flow, it's short but beautifully written.
"Beneath my skin
What will you see?
A spark of hatred
Yearning to breathe" - my favorite stanza.
5/5

It was short and so sad....I liked the expressions here and there and they made the poem wonderful but Its:It's or it is
And my fave lines are;

Heart beating,
cold as stone

Keep it up
Laura

This was excellent. the emotion and hurt present in this poem was superb.

5/5 David

Thought it was nicely penned. you did a wonderful job. 5/5

This was quite a short piece it flowed nicely holding deep emotions which you portrayed within depth. The flow seemed almost chat wise very good in my eyes. The poem was intensely sad yet eerie and dark which I love about it. You have portrayed a beautiful dark piece right here. Well done ~mel

It was a short poem but yet sad and deep.The flow was very well done!!!Nice poem dear!!
Best wishes
And take care.

Short, sad, to the point. please keep writing, you are doing an amazing job! kudos for you <3

"Beneath my skin
What will you see?
A spark of hatred
Yearning to breathe"

~

I adored the aforementioned stanza. The whole piece endears to me completely. It was truly a poignant write which produced strong and powerful emotions between the lines. I think you did a nice job with this heartrending piece. Nicely done. 5/5 ~Debbie

Wow! Nice poem =] I love the short lines, cause they are so powerfull! Keep up the good work.
xxx

This was really good i loved it! nice job!

This was also good, though very short and contained, it was very strong and brilliant to me. 5/5
gabriella

"Lie in bed
Think of you
Holding on
Its Nothing new"

my favorite line
great job
5/5
Sam Mayo

Wow. This poem was short yet the emotion was strong.
That was beautiful and the flow was almost perfect!
great job!
5/5
((Amber))