Hey, i'm really sorry, you've commented quite a few of my poems and i don't know if i've ever returned the favour, but anyway...
this poem... WOW! i loved how you started each line with a single word- ok that sounds obvious but you know what i mean.
the rhyme was kindof cliche, but it worked. and it worked well.
it was beautifully sad/haunting.
great read/write

The poem doesnt seem to flow very smoothly and at first you think it's just bad rhythm, but then the last line hits very nicely and pulls the whole thing together, giving the slightly choppy refrain home and solace. amazing how one line can make something would-be mediocre into a masterpiece.

Great work 5/5

This piece has great rhythm and very captivating atmosphere. You described your feelings in a great way and portrayed truly powerful images with emotions through the poem.
Excellently done.

Wow...that all i can say