Oh, this is quaint...like a haiku..pretty nice

Hey Ashley :) What a great poem! :)

For your first Tanka it was amazing. To be honest I really don't like short poems but this one is fantastic. 'Straight to the point'

5/5! all the way :D

I haven't exactly read Tanka's before, but by your description, I think you did really well. I read it over and over checking syllables, and you got it right on. You also talked about life, and it was very true in your poem. I think that this could become strong! Great job!

Love it.
in general i love the mystique >.< of japanese poetry.
lawl.
anyways keep up the great work.

I'd say this is a great poem you have!

Hey, it was pretty good at that.

Niice poem! its going in my favs i like that style...=D and my fav part ish:
Love to make you weak,
Loss to make you cry in pain
that ish so cool ^_^ nice choice in words...=DD

~*~skYe~*~

Niice poem! its going in my favs i like that style...=D and my fav part ish:
Love to make you weak,
Loss to make you cry in pain
that ish so cool ^_^ nice choice in words...=DD

~*~skYe~*~

Short and sweet. I like the last line a lot 4/5