Save Me (i love you TOM)

Sitting here with these four walls surrounding me
just me standing all alone in the rain in sadness missing you i can here your laughter in my ears
its ringing come back to me why would you leave me for so so very long in time i guess you will see that you loving me was never a mistake
OH look you over there with her it breaks my heart so very so
you looked at me kissed me touched me like before feeling soon faded but i will hold on as long as i can to u i can not feel your touch your warmth that brightness my day i have been in darkness for so very long save me from this danger that i have made with my self
save me

p.s
Please comment on this poem its one of the first what do u think ??