I didn't even have
Enough time to scream
I fell into the water
In this horrible dream

Beautiful and the message behind it made it even better. The rhyming wasn't forced at all =) Keep up the good work!

5/5

This is great piece. You created excellent imagery. You're wording in this one is good. It is unique poem with strong atmosphere. 5/5

Excellently written piece, with good rhyming scheme.
My favorite stanza is:

-I was on
A frozen lake
The ice was frigid
My soul it seemed to take-

This piece has really powerful message, and great choice of words.
I love the way you write!
5/5

Wow this was awesome..... I have never read anything so.... I can't even explain it... all in all very well done....

Very good

Another beautiful write with a beautiful meaning. Your poem is filled with amazing lines and emotions and its truly touching! 5/5

Very very nice laura...

This poem was absolutely amazing,
one of your best.
my favourite stanza,
"I stumbled and slipped
And fell to the floor
The ice touched my body
And I froze to the core"
keep up the great work
5/5.

The ice touched my body
And I froze to the core

them too lines were amazingly written
the whole poem was beautiful.
Its a good realisition that alot of poeple do infact skate around on thin ice when living their life. absolutely loved it 5/5 xxx

Wow.. thats all i can say.. your so ahmazing.. this is great!

Wow.. thats all i can say.. your so ahmazing.. this is great!

Wow.. thats all i can say.. your so ahmazing.. this is great!

U ARE SO RIGHT IT IS NEVER TO LATE OMG U LOVE IT,,,,, ITS POWERFUL! OUTSTANDING JOB

Wow this poem is beautiful i can't even describe how much it touches me!

I also really loved this poem! WOW, your writting is really great! and there's very deep emotion behind each poem too.
keep it up!
all the best --Viola

Your realy good!
loved this poem 5/5
nice job

Another excellent poem ...your poems really seem to interest me..maybe its because i can relate to them in so many ways...i dont know but whatever it is..you're doing a great job at it.5/5

Wow. u rrly kno how to touch ones soul with such amazing poetry <333

Beautifully well written...I luv this poem..
U have done a great joB..the imagenary was great..
-sarah

Beautifully well written...I luv this poem..
U have done a great joB..the imagenary was great..
-sarah