Grown doesnt rhyme with down. change it.. grrrrrrr,.. lol

Well other than that nothing was WRONG. but it wasnt smooth enough. the syllables in each line varied too much. like some lines were WAY long, and others too short.

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I sensed a greal deal of emotion in this poem Ialso read between the lines that were crossed over and I hope the broken heart fully mends. Nothing seems to hurt as bad as pretending, but this poem also reflected on the healing.

Your poem was excellent i like it a lot, also the meaning 2 it was good, i also felt this way before but instead it was a girl, 5/5

Great poem.It had a good meaning behind it.Great job.Keep up the good work.

Nice work has a nice meaning! could have been better but nice job

WAY TO GO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was totally powerful and an amazing ending! You just tell it like it is, but manage to do so beautifully! LOVE YOUR STUFF!!!!
Charisma*

Love it.
Had a huge amount of emotion behind it.
Great meaning. :) love it

5/5

♥Mz.Raven