Just you & I

by Sandra Campbell   Jul 14, 2007


I saw you there
As I took a glance
and saw your smile
your eyes were glowing
bright and shiny
as I took a few steps closer
you looked me in the eye
the world begun to spin
I looked around and saw no one besides you and me
The hall was silent just you and I
When it spun again
the hall was a rush
at that moment all I knew what was real
was you and I
I know that we both only saw each other when the world spun because in both our eyes when they meet everything has a purpose, a meaning and changes the world..and in those seconds its only and I

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  • 16 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    You repeate yourself alot in the poem. which could take away from the depth of it if you did it any more. but you didn't so good work :)

    i think you should break your last line up for it seems to go on for 3 or 4 lines which made me a bit uninterested in reading itt. but the lay out of the poem was good :)

    keep up to good work :)

    --ps: you signed up for our club a few days ago, and you are accepted please go to your right hand side and click on the discussions under poetry club and have a talk with us :)

    good luck on your poems :)

  • 16 years ago

    by sheila

    Great poem i really like it 5/5

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