Ryhmes.. we all want to write poems that ryhmes.. why? why?.. Lol great poem, I love the fact that it ryhmes. I'm a bit disappointed, because I thought that the poeem would be sader and deeper but it wasnt. Oh well!! guess we cant always get what we want. (sighs) You have my vote.. 1.5 thumbs up^

This was a good write, though it wasnt as strong as your others. I feel like some of the rhymes were forced.. and also there were spelling errors that you may want to fix
'And doesnâ??t really care.'
and
'He just writs,' i think its meant to be writEs

good try though
4/5
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Hey i liked the poem...may i ask who it is about?

It could be longer and deeper. Rhyming is typical.
Deep inside that house,
There is no mouse.
^This two lines totally throw me off. You wrote this second line (There is no mouse) only because it rhymes and that leaves bad impression and destroys flow completely. I like some lines very much.