Very strong message, and emotions. lova lovea,keep up the great work. hola, como estas?5/5 fabu-lous!!!!!!

This is awsome, It cut deep into my soul! The last line could use a ! insteaid of a . but thats just my thought :D

Wow a unique cut poem finally 5/5 for sure and pm me anytime

Well, it was really well written, and honestly, please don't take this the wrong way, it's not original.. there's so many poems on the same topic. if you tried to spread your horizons for writing styles, your writings would atract all sorts of peoples attentions.

Omg... that really touched me. Great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
~*~Skye~*~

Your nasty dang ur so good like u kill me dang i really like this

Another fantastic poem ^_^ I know the feelings behind this one =p I've just never actually done it ^_^ 5/5 and the form of this poem was great =)
Rhea

Great poem different description from the usual poem i read about suicide.well like that uniquness, and the rhyming too.so with the feeling enveloped in each lines..so sad!! Keep it up!!!

Very vivid imagery here, though it's not something I'd like to imagine. Nonetheless, the flow and rhyming were flawless. Really great write. 5/5

marcella

Very vivid imagery here, though it's not something I'd like to imagine. Nonetheless, the flow and rhyming were flawless. Really great write. 5/5

marcella

Very vivid imagery here, though it's not something I'd like to imagine. Nonetheless, the flow and rhyming were flawless. Really great write. 5/5

marcella

Omg i did not mean to do that... it wouldn't go. sorry.

I loved this poem...The vocab was just right and the flow was flawless throughout the whole thing....

A young dying girl is what I see
Take a look closer,this girl is me

^ My favorite lines...

Keep up the awesome writting...

* 5/5 * ^_^

I love this poem....its very deep and wrote in right form and perfectly worded.... 5/5

NOOOOO!! DON'T DIE! :3 anywyas, nice poem. T~T although I don't really like the death part, it gave a strong message, especially at the end.

"A young dying girl is what I see
Take a look closer,this girl is me"

These 2 lines were emotional!! 5/5

This is an excellent poem 5/5 for sure.Congratulations,you have done a great work.Take care of you.Best regards,Michelle XxXx

This poem is like your seeing i through a third persons perspective its really good and has a good flow to it. Its also good that you don't do it for real, as i think far too many people do but its good that your expressing your feelings in words rather than actions 4/5

Beautiful poem! I loved it! Very unique ....awesome poem! loved it! keep it up!

Excellent poem..shows real emotions.
earnestly,its brilliant!!

Wonderful
this poem jumped out at me in realization
I too have many poems similar to this
&& it really hits home for me
I think everything in this poem
was pretty much right on
flow, rhyme, vocab
everything was great!
5/5
kaila