Mad cute [poem]!!
i love it<333

Wow...You should really put this in stanzas, and use more puncuation..It would be pretty awesome...Keep writting though....

Well done ! I loved the repitition because it really got your message through. The poem was deep and the language used was stricking. *5/5*

Great poem.I could really feel your emotions in it.A few grammer mistakes,but you could fix that up in a heartbeat.

"My heart beats painfully bleeding out for you
Im burning on the inside and my soul is damn near through
Through of being gentle and sweet and then taken advantage
Through of being loyal and true then in return getting damaged"

That is my favorite part of the poem. :)

Keep writing,
Miranda

Good!

For this one,I love title very much, For the entire piece, You really describe your concept well, but I don't see edgy parts or lines it, but the one thing that is great on it is the message on it!

Keep it up!

Great poem!
I could feel the emotion! Loved it. And the repetition gave it more depth. Keep it up!
-C.P.-