Smile in denial

by Taz   Jul 25, 2007


My heart tells me my eyes are true,
my eyes tell you my heart is blue,

my emotions are deepened,
and my heart is weekend,

you opened my eyes,
and destroyed our lives,

you stood bye to watch us cry,
than you ask why,
and we lie,
just to see u smile in denial,
as i do often to you,

yet my love is still true,
and it only burns for you,
i still care for you as i always do.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    WOw! Brillant write. Great imagery though. 5.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    "you stood bye to watch us cry,
    than you ask why,
    and we lie,
    just to see u smile in denial,
    as i do often to you,"

    I liked this poem. You've done a good job on it
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by urmyoneandonly

    I really really like this poem.. i love the rhyming.. prolly cause im not much of a rhymer.. lol its very good.. Great Job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Aaron Deevers

    Nice rhythm, can say that I like it. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Amberinaa

    Your heart would be weakened not weekend. .
    two different meanings, and not bye but simply by. Your writing is pretty simple and your rhymes are plain. Try to add more to what you are writing and really make the reader feel what you are reading, use a thesaurus and use change up the words you do, and try harder rhymes.

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