Very good I loved how it didn't nessecarily follow the rhyme rules and all that good stuff nice work to your friend. 5/5

Awwww wow!!.. its soo touching.. and storylike.. good job!!
you shouldnt be afraid to write at all!!
can you just read one of mine though??.. you dont even have to comment or rate if you dont want.. i just love sharing :)

It had some good rhymes through it! it was so touching nice job!

Very much like a story but good n/e ways!!!
Your friends is good!
Woo 5/5

Aww this is great! =]

Very creative piece of poetry. Loved the wordings and the metaphorical content. The way words strung makes it cohesive and a quality piece. Only thing I would suggest is to improve the structure, 5/5 from me :)

Fsams

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Aww.. That was so sweet. Very touching.
Nicely done.
Keep it up!

TC

This is really good. I loved it. 5/5 from me.

Wow, your friend is amazing, awesome stuff.