Wow very nice love your poems 5/5

Ooohh.Thats so cute...
It was short yet sweet and to the point...
But you might want to change coz to Cause...
I think it sounds better...

Overall 5/5

Omg thats a buetiful poem its amazing *thumbs up* 5/5

This poem has a very nice free flowing rhythm. I can relate to the sentiment here.

It has a great flow u used very strong words! again it was amazing!

Gene,

There was indeed a minor issue with the flow. It seemed quite... uneven on the whole. Though this piece didn't rank up with your masterpieces (which usually sweep me off my feet), I still had an enjoyable visit.

"When you don't want to talk
I feel like an abandoned heart"

^ I quite liked that couplet. For some reasons, it stood out from the rest of the lines. It captured my heart. Sort of.

It was bitter and sweet. Yet try to put [more] sensory images in your poems, rather than with plain descriptions.

A fine attempt, nevertheless.

Take care,
Debbie

p.s. I liked your old poem, "Girl In The Jeepney". Lol. =]

I know u can write more better than this..ooops don't get me wrong i still like this one coz it was really sweet though i know u can use other words to describe your feelings coz the repeation just somehow ruined the flow and i know u have the talent too. Nice poem..

Hello sir,
i was writing a comment on this great poem before and when i was done writing a big note i saw my internet connection was gone, isnt it bad ? lol. but it is back now.

sir, this was a great one as always, you have showed the meaning of love in a way that you made me stop and think, wait, this is all true, that is love, yet we cannot leave without it,
another great job sir.

Very unique. I like it.

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