Good work, it flowed well throughout.
It had meaning, there could have been more emotion but it was honest and simple.
a good piece
xxx

I just love the way all your poems make sense to me. They're simple, yet very good. Like this one. It really gets the message across and the rhyming is excellent. One of my personal favorites. Keep up the good work!! :)

This is such a lovely peice, i really enjoyed reading it. I could feel all of your emotions. And i can relate to this poem too!

there were a few MINOR mistakes, im going to pick up on them because thats what commenting is about [helping people]..
the first is pur opinion..
the first lines reads:
'Why should i hurt why should i cry'
prehaps there should be a use of a commar:
'Why should i hurt (,) why should i cry'

the second was...
In the third line i beleive there is a TINY typing error.. it reads:
'You say you love me, but i don't believe it true'
i beilves its meant to be:
'You say you love me, but i don't believe IT'S true'

And finally in the last stanza, third line it
reads:
'Its now the end and i cant stand you at all'

I beleive its meant to read

'It(')s now the end and i cant stand you at all'

Other than that i thought your peom was brilliant ...a great read!

.. deffinalty a 5/5 [even with the above TINY errors]

xxx

It is a nice poe. the again it is very strange for me to see how u emotional took me into the other poem and now take me to another end when there is no trust at all.
U will be a popular poet in the future.