Comments : Time

  • 16 years ago

    by JaMeS

    Nice writing i just got confused alot :S but a thought provoking piece

  • 16 years ago

    by GretaInsideOut

    Lol, thought provoking, another term for
    "what the hell is she on about?"
    Heheh, Oh well!

  • 16 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Wow this is very true and the words fit together perfectly
    great job 5/5


  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Wow great poem describing aspects of time. The flow is beautiful plus the content is great, the way words strung ech other makes it standout. 5/5 all the way


  • 16 years ago

    by Lindsay

    I agree -- very thought provoking! :) I love the emotion and word choice in this marvelous piece! Great work! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Wonderful poem....the flow was perfect ...even though nonrhyming poems dont really interest me this one is good. i like it.

    "Determined souls fuse together doubt,
    Pretentious hate among your love,
    Cloudy daze fog your memory,
    Time elapses into nothing."

    ^^these are my favorite lines..

    and i love your choice of words. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow this was a great poem you have done a really great job that shows u are really talented.
    keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Shadows Reign

    Wow. Beautifully done. You have used some very nice words, well done.

  • 16 years ago

    by tears i cry

    To be honest ive been trying to write a poem bout time for ages but i cant seem to get a good flow
    you on the other hand seemed to have handled it very well
    5/5 again

  • 16 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    Great piece of work!!

    God bless u

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow, this is just amazing, you should be proud on your self, topic is excellent and you created truly impressing and breathtaking atmosphere in it. I love every line, it is just so impressing.

    -Time ticking away this hour,
    Moon swept shadows along my face.
    Solemn sorrys put to no end,
    With a frantic dream to trace the time,
    Time of no end,
    Time of all.
    Calling those who will not answer-

    ^This seven lines left me without the words, they are totally incredible.

  • 16 years ago

    by Switchblade89

    I've always loved poems about time, and you managed to write a very good one about it. I love the use you put it in.