Our love

by StopTheMadness   Aug 5, 2007


Our Love
Our Love Was forbidden
Everyone Said it was wrong
We didn't listen

Now look what we've done
we've made a mess
we were in love
it didn't matter what they thought
it all when wrong when you said that we have to go
and i said no
why you wanted to leave no idea

then in the didtands there
the answer i was looking for "come one" he said
be for they come
NO!' i yelled

they bust in door
he pushed me out of the way
that was the day i new they were right
out love was wrong

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  • 16 years ago

    by iluvbradley

    I love your emotion in this poem!! It's not like a fairy tale either...even though I usually like those kinds...I really liked the way the poem turned around at the end...keep up the good work!=)

  • 16 years ago

    by Kiss My Sass

    This was excellent. I loved the emotion and the twist in the end. 5/5
    Thank you so much for commenting on mine. It meant alot

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Good job on this piece. Keep writing.
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by 4EvErMaKeBeLiEvE

    I enjoyed this one. But you chould check the way you spell, 'didtands' distance, 'we have to go' you have to go, 'come one' come on, 'be for' before. Just make sure to correct these mistakes next time. But I really do like your work!!

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