Comments : Kingdoms

  • 16 years ago

    by Semmie

    Pretty cool era to pick i like it

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Atmosphere of this poem is incredible and it is very powerful. Short but effective, I like it very much. Original topic and it has great flow. You maybe can change one thing, if you want. I have one suggestion how to make this piece even more effective. First line could be Kingdoms... and the last line also could be Kingdoms.
    Kingdoms...
    Ancient elves
    Dwarves and the dragons
    All on the same land
    Wars and alliences
    Age old legends
    Heroes and villains
    Crimes and deducers
    Kings courts for justice
    Swiftly dealt mercy
    Gallows and stocks
    Farms and flocked sheep
    Bandits and knights
    Horses and jousts
    Sun bright by day
    Majestic moon by night
    Kingdoms...
    ^I think that this is even more better than your first version. Anyway great job:)

  • 16 years ago

    by tyanna

    Wow.. Very good at wording this one, short to the point yet descriptive lines..I liked it!