This was actually quite sweet in a sad way. I loved the story you portrayed behind it with great emotions all into one. Well done on creating such a tragic love poem. Good rhyme good flow. ~mel

This poem was very touching.
Your flow was excellent and you had a great vocabulary.
I love how you took a situation that is often occuring and made it unique with your talent.
A splendid Read,
Elaine.

"This girl I guess I'll never have,
No matter what I do.
But I swear I won't quit dreaming,
Of the day I'm with you."

Oh how I am so fimiliar with this stanza life indeed is like your poem such emotion

Wow... just insane, i never thought people go through the same things that i did... but here is proof. Just know that I'm always here if you need a shoulder to cry on. Keep on keepin on.

That is so true!

I think everyone got a high school crush.and your poem is so true:] 5/5

I was definatly nodding my head to this poem, because it's so true. every line, every word- very true. everyone has their so called 'high-school crush.' it's true. we all have our crushes, the people who we just can't seem to stop thinking about. very true. honestly, you worded this perfectly. 5/5.

It has really empressed me! the best intonation to tell this sort of story... i guess this poem is best being read aloud, because rhythme here is perfect.
while reading the first stanzas, i thought it was kind of common poem, but starting from

"Her house, she said, the perfect place,
It's kind of like a date."

it really got be attention. you express the mod an d feeling of the hero so well; how happy he is with her and how sad he got alone.

such simple feelings, still so important.
great write.

Awwww. that was so beautiful. your words slide off with such rythem. great work.