Good stuff! keep up the good work!

Omg... how beautiful this is, got me all teary( that doesn't happen easy). It's just heart-breaking what life does to people. They both deserved to live. Ahh thouse dots and kinda repetitions made the whole piece even more deeper and sadder. Amazing! I really adore this one.
Powerful
5/5 thought i think it deserves more.

I've NEVER EVER read a poem like this!!! its good its like idk its just good i'm adding this to my favorites. 5/5

Wow, so powerful poem, you expressed emotions incredibly and topic is good. This is my favorite poem of yours that I read, it is so effective and you wrote it in a excellent form. I really enjoyed reading it.

Excellent!

Two thumbs up! that to describe this piece, This one conveyed true emotions and so as its message, every lines deals with such efforts and they rhyme as well. Nicely penned!

keep it up!

Direct, simple, and beautiful! 5/5

I love the way you've used repetition to enhance the more poowerful parts of the poem, it works really well. Such an in-depth piece (sorry for the pun, i didn't mean that literally lol)
DnB

I know how it feels, when it feels like one's dying inside. Half-dead, half alive. Looking back though, I guess I was being kinda foolish.

It was portrayed really well ^^. It's dark and sad, but I likes it. You did great job on it1

Wow! Spectaular poem! It is so sad but so beautiful! Amazing write!!!!!

Wow. This was quite amazing. I love the structure here. The repetition made for a very powerful read without being too overbearing. def a 5/5

marcella

I had to read this a few times to comprehend, not the usualy style but still fitted nicely. I was a bit confused when you used the term 'dove'...did you mean drove. slightly cliche but still powerful imagery. well done xoxo