Ok.it mite just be me but..i think .that was damn powerful.. a brilliant ending to it.. superbly penned.. DAMN SAD ='[ but an awesome job done in expressiong .. i loved readin thru it .. again n again.. great work .

You're Amazing :o

~Wake~

Let us start with the title: I thought the title was enticing and entrancing, so that was an awesome start. The scattered imagery helped a lot with the essence of the poem and really made it for me. The ending made me smile because of how the simile made me think of what was going on in the narrators head. This poem was captivating, and quite unexpectedly, so. It was just an awesome read.

Take care, (I don't know your name so I will call you) Tickles!

=]

~Richiiieee

Amazing. good work and you are doing great.
it was a bit sad though. read it bout 5 times now.

-daniel

Wonder write, you used great imagery to capture your readers imagination. I'm normally a fan of rhyming poems, but this one is very well written. Makes you see from the perpective of the writer.
My only negative comment would be re: this line ..
"And watches the television as it shows old re-runs."
Seems to throw the flow off in my opinion. Same imagery would be help in a shorter sentence.
Overall very nice poem though - [5/5]

Sorry i didn't ellaborate on that...
In that stanza, you use lines with 10 syllables or less, the last line had 14 .. if you could get it to 10 my personal opinion is that it would improve the flow of that stanza.

Keep up the good work.

I love this. writers block my butt...
<3