Wow this poem was really heartfelt and sad, I didn't expect the twist at the end but it was really good. Excellent job 5/5 GG23

OMG thats so sad. Wow i got teary eyed. Anyways Good job it was a very nice poem keep up the good work.

plz comment/rate some of my poems if you have time <3

Gut wrenching thats all I can say makes my heart ache

Wow really powerdul and amazing poem
good job

ashleigh

Whoa
wow
this was so sad
so so sad
it game me major goosebumps
you wrote this so well
good job
really good job

Keenan

Omg this was so sadly written a great poem, i felt the pain, but written greatly, keep up the great work cause you are great. a 5/5 from me as you really desrve it

This is a gloomy poem and it was very well written though there are some parts that confused me due to the wrong grammar. The description and the imagination were great, i really appreciate it coz i can easily picture out the scene..Keep it up! 4.5/5

All I can say to this sad peice, is.
It makes my heart ache,
My eyes water,
and My stomach clench.

Well done,
a deeply effecting read,
5/5 Elaine.

Very sad powerful poem well described I just want to ask with the lines
He went to there cabinet,
And started to sweat.
He looks at the medicine,
Then walked away.
The first line is written in the past tense, the third in the present tense. This confuses things a bit as the flow of the poem is interrupted. Except for this very good poem.

GREAT JOB, almost a masterpiece. well is a MASTERPIECE! :D well keep up the masterpieces so i'll be entertained. lol. ill ttly ttyl.

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chatty

That poem is so sad but you managed it well and it really hit me...keep up the good work

Wow that is really sad but a really great poem....i really liked it 5/5 always Manda

It was a well written poem, true. Personally, I didn't like it. I can't find any way to like sad things. I found it a bit hard to get my own feelings out of the way, and make an unbiased opinion, but there it is. A decent poem, well written and smooth throughout.

Wow..That was deep...And really sad...I like it...5/5

Nice story, however, I didn't really like the way the poem flowed. It was fairly choppy, and didn't rhyme, but had a single rhyme thrown into one of the stanzas and that threw me off. Once again a few grammarical issues. Keep writing!

Aww is sad what happen...and it is a very great poem!

A sad poem!! and a lesson must be learned from your poem... excellent poem!

Awww this is so sad..the ending almost made me cry....

there are a few mistakes..probably typos..

"He went into there room,"

^^there should be changed to their.

"he walks over to the knifes"

^^knifes should be changed to knives.

but overall ..really nice poem...it deserves a 5/5

Nice topic of choice im sure some people can relate to that

I like the twist in it. Mine usually have sad depressing endings. :D lol. I had to do a happy face for the irony of it. ^_^ I'll give it a four.