It Had depth, it had meaning, I like it very much, Very well done,

Best Regards

Peter

Well the way I sung it in my head it was pretty good.

The first line of the bridge I think you messed up. I don't why you did this
I think you mean I don't KNOW why you did this
I'll give it a five but I wish I could tell how you want it to sound in the musical sense so I know for sure it's a five.

Hey babe, great song I really like it, you know only thing that would make it better is the music and you singing it.

Pretty good job for your first song! The topic was cliched, but when writing songs, it's hard to make them original.
This was a little ackward because of overrhyming:

And see an empty space
Where you used to lay your head
A space I can't replace

But other than that, nice job.

Thats very good im sure it would sound better in voice if i heard you or who ever you choose to sing it but i read it as a song and as a poem and i thought the poem sounded abit better but this isnt a you did rubbish comment because it was amazingly well written i loved the subject and your choice of words :) well done

WOW this was a beautiful song and it did touched my heart (i wonder what it sounds like, hope i can hear it played).. the message of heart was so there. and i love the whole songs..very impressive. KEEP IT UP!

You've got a lot of talent! I've tried and tried again to write a song...they are all terrible, lol. This is wonderful.

Again, this was so beautiful,
you have proved it that you are a great poet, keep it up dear....

This is a beautiful song...especially for it being your first....i really like it....i wish i knew what it sounds like...great job.

5/5

Excellent exept for: And you left me here in tears
u should get rid of the here

This is pretty excellent. Great rhyme and flow, I could definitely see this, or rather hear it, as a song. Wonderful write. 5/5

marcella

AN AMAZING SONG!!
LOVE IT!!

OH i LOVED this one
look i don't even know the rhythem you have in mind for this song but you got me singing.
5

Its good! have confidence! dont stop writing! x