So sad and full of hurt, i'm sorry to hear that you are hurt, this was so emotional and impressively writen, with this technique it even made it more powerful.

5/5 always, David

I really liked this one.
i can totally relate to it and whatnot.
i love that writing concept
i think i might try it.
keep it up :]
<333Shannon

Wow i can relate to this
this poem is sad
but i really love it
good job :D

I havn't read any of your work in ages and I just noticed you had posted newer poems so I took up the opotunity to comment. I really enjoyed this piece, the poetry style is one of my favorites they really catch my interest as did this piece. I liked the emotion such as anger and also sadness you portrayed into this it was great really deep and really beautiful. I don't know why this has a 4.2 rating it deserves more. Definitly a 5/5 in my eyes. ~mel