Comments : I WISH*

  • 16 years ago

    by ujustmeiloveu

    Wow good job lol

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    Wow, I love creative poems like this so unique and like none other. Your really took my breath away with this piece, excellent work, I'll be reading more of your poetry.

  • 16 years ago

    by Genna

    Awh, this was so sweat. Such an inspirational heart felt poem! Loved this.

  • 16 years ago

    by LovemaBabymAmA

    AWeSoMe...

  • 16 years ago

    by maryann

    Ii likkeeeee all ur quotesss n das d 1st poem i read of ursss i love it:D haha ive been comin on dis website 4 d past 3 years i dont write anyfin on here i like readiing GOOD ON U :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Phoebe

    This is really cute and
    VERY GOOD

    -PHOEBE

  • 16 years ago

    by PJ

    Wow I Like This.. This Is So Cool, Yeah Thankz For The Comment, Yeah My Name Is PJ As Well, Buts Its Really Paul John

  • 16 years ago

    by bioncia

    Ur right i do like it

  • 16 years ago

    by FromHeroToZero

    Really nice poem
    :) ll check out more of your stuff
    really really good !!
    X x

  • 16 years ago

    by rachael

    This is cool, it rhymes too, and is kinda clever. the last stanza is awesome.

  • 16 years ago

    by janiL

    W0w 0_o
    you're really great.. period.

  • 16 years ago

    by tearsnkisses

    I completely understand where ur coming from with this poem... i love it..especially: i wish i was your eye liner,
    in your eyes id be,
    finally theres a moment,
    where all you see is me,

  • 16 years ago

    by Meaghann

    Omg! this is so cute! thanks for commenting on mine too. keep it up. xox meea <3

  • 16 years ago

    by alwayssofresh16

    You write so beautiful... It's like it comes with ez.

  • 16 years ago

    by X Kashies Misery X

    Haha that is atcually pretty cool....

  • 16 years ago

    by Urms

    Hmm this is cutee<3

  • 16 years ago

    by Riffy

    Wow!
    I love this :)
    I thought it was really clever, they way you managed to incorporate daily items into this poem and the message was sweet and clear
    x.

  • 16 years ago

    by Chase

    I really enjoyed this poem!!!! Puting meaning tons of mean... nice!! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    FANTASTIC POEM! very well done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Ok, I feel the title of this poem could of been a lot better, and drawn the reader in a little better.

    The overall messege of this poem was very well written. The flow and the structure was good as well as the rhymes.

    This poem isn't in my favorites list, since I have no poems at all in my list, but I found this poem and I really like it. The meaning and the messege of this poem was fantasticlly written.

    Yes, this poem deffinitly has meaning to me. As many of you know, I write a lot of love poems and for each poem I personally write they have a meaning to me. And for every poem I read, I try to make a connection with me somehow. This poem connected with me even though I don't have a loved one in my life at the moment.

    Ok, it wasn't really a free verse, it has a rhyming scheme too it which was nice.

    I can't really break it down anymore then it already is, each stanza is very straight foward and I am almost positive everyone understands the meaning of each stanza. But all in all, this poem is not about wishing to be select items, it is more or less about how the person wishes to be with the one he/she loves.

    The only really advice I have is to use better puncuation instead of using all comma's since it makes it feel it is all one ongoing sentence which it isn't. Also I'd advice to use capitals for words such as "i"

    Other than that, excellent write, keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe