It was okay. i like it. but to be honest, maybe u shouldnt ryhme every other line with eachother. go check out my poems and tell me what you think.
may i make a suggestion? just rhyme the second lines and last lines like my poems.

To me this poem wasn't as good as the other one I read, I liked the meaning portrayed behind it and I know you were trying to pour your heart out into this poem because of what you wrote at the bottom but the emotion just wasn't that strong to me. Overall I give this a 4/5. A good effort. ~mel

God bless him honey and you too!....I can't even imagine what its like to have someone you love so far away, let alone fighting for the country...you must be proud of that :-).....this poem was awesome and don't let the distance ruin your love!!
I'm adding you to my faves :-) you write like me!
Chelsey

Awhh this is sweet.
love it! 5/5