Absolutely amazing.....this is a great poem.

it flowed nicely..i dont see any improvement needing done...i can relate..i wish i was happy but at this moment im not..just had a break up and now the only poems i write are sad...

but keep your head up...you'll be happy soon.

5/5 on this.

Good job. keep it up. i know exactly what you mean

Pretty good..it had good flow...a bit repetitive in places but i could feel the emotions and the struggle the person is having...good write..keep it up!

Amie

Wow so much emotion in this poem its amazing

asheigh

Great poem
you wrote this quite well
tis confusing
but it should be
it is relating to how you feel
which i find you explain is confused lol
tis real good
also thx for the comment

Keenan

This is an emotional poem.

"i try to work my way trhough but keep getting pulled back"

my fav line. it really expresses the way you feel and how hard it is for you to cope. though you're at least trying, ur not likee this coz u want to be, its like a burden on top of you.

i love it.
great poem
much love .xx

Your poems are sad, but
they seem so full of true
emotions. Thanks for
commenting my poem.
The haiku poem is actually
each stanza is a haiku and I
put them together to create
one whole poem. I noted it on
the poem after you mentioned it
to me. Thanks. :)