Awesome poem very good choice of words.
goodjob

ashleigh

I liked it, the flow wasnt perfect but i really thought you did a good job.
love Tara-Kay
x

Ecellently written, the emotions was great. Its very obvious the amount of work you put into it. The flow was flawless and each line was fantastic loved the piece. 5/5

I liked it. Simple but i still think it conveyed emotion very well. I liked the words used too. Great job. =)
~ Lainey

A very powerful poem with a lot of strong emotion it clearly comes from the heart. I hope things get better soon, we all have a purpose in this world some times it's just a case of holding on long enough to find it.

Heya great poem
tis real good i agree with ashleigh
great choice of words
great description
it has wonderful imagery
glad to of read them

keenan

Wonderfully written.
full of emotion.
great work.
keep it up 5/5

Nice job....i liked it...but the flow was off in places and the rhyming seemed to mix. only one stanza rhymed and the rest didnt..so that threw the flow off... maybe you should make the 5th stanza not rhyme...it would read alot better but thats just a suggestion..

but i do like the message behind this poem .. but because of the flow i have to give this one a 4/5.

I love this piece definently the last
stanza. It's wonderful work. Everything
flows perfectly together.

A definite 5/5!!

Nice poem i love the 5th stanza...5/5 ^_^

This poem flows really well i love it well done
xx

Well done.. pretty good,, and it written welll ur words has a deeply meaning great one!

Wow.. i liked that. .has alot of sides to it ..nicely done.

"..No! I am alive,
Weak and pitiful.
A disappointment!
Someone that has no reason to live!.."

loved the contradiction within urself in these lines .

Great Work

~Wake~