This is a great poem, though better when you read it to me yourself. The flow was very nice and the structure is really good. This also has a lot of meaning to it, great job!

You have followed your own style and thats a good thing. Keep it up

Tc'Fsams

It was a beautifully written piece. it was very powerful and had a lot of emotions behind it. it was a lovely poem to read. nice work 5/5

Hmmm a bit of foreshadowing at the end..pretty good..i like the whole story poem.

Ahhh. There goes that ending of yours = D Still really good.

.... this poem is nice i don't have a ? though. well written

Well written.
I like the ending of it, the way you make it forsee for the future. nice.