Wow, this one is so deep, truly priceless piece, amazingly written. You have great talent. You created captivating and very vivid imagery through the poem, and the word usage in it is flawless.
Keep writing, 5/5 from me

Whoa...this is deep... i really enjoyed this one... every word was just so powerful... you did a great job.

the only thing i see wrong is this...

"No one notices the dieing girl upon the ground,"

^^in this line "dieing" should be changed to "dying" i think you spelled it wrong.. but i dont know lol.

overall this is great.5/5=]

This poem was VERY good, I really njoyed every moment of it. There were a few things you could have changed, but for the most part it was VERY good! If you would like my opinion I would be pleased to share it, however, I have learned that not everyone likes to be constructively criticised. Best wishes and keep writing. 5/5

Oh babe this is priceless. The fact that you have brought realism into a porcelin (sp) doll is amazing.

Through an object you have given life, emotion, and sorrow. That is excellent.

I know at time we all feel like the doll you speak of and writing this is just a terrific outlook and shows great creativity.

--Sher

Good poem

ooo did you think it was a one liner:P:P tids not
lol
i really liked this
i liked how you made the doll seem real
through i find the porcelaine doll over used in poems
you did a great job
really loved it wonderfully written
i shall read more now:):)

Keenan

Wow, this was a great piece. The detailed descriptions were amazing. The emotion is really strong all throught out as well. I really enjoyed reading this one. 5/5

marcella

I love when some one take a dead object, and give it life.
The sad thing is, that not every body can pull it off...but you can.
Great work!
It was a pure pleasure to read it.

So deep and thought provoking. Really made me think, yet it was like I knew what you meant, but at the same time I didn't. Hard to explain, I'll shut up before I confuse you haha. But I loved it beyond thoughts. 5/5

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Lizzi

This poem was soo real and it amazed more as i read. good job and you are an awesome writer. good job

I think that how you related a porcelin doll to a little girl was done very well. I LOVED THE METAPHOR... the flow was amazing

5/5

This was great, I loved how you made the doll hold human qualitys really good use of personification. You have an interesting imagination which you put into poems and create such wonderful pieces. The emotional sadness which I felt coming from this was deep and powerful I couldn't shake it at all. Started great ended great. ~Mel

Wow very deep, and i loved the flow, keep it up 5/5

Wow that was breathtaking.. it had a beauty that was almost haunting. It seems to me like an angel who is having a nightmare about the way that the earth is turned out with all of the hate. It also seems to me that in the end the angel dies before it is able to save the world from what it has become, and that depresses the angel. I can really relate to this poem because everyone knows what it feels like to moun something that you have no power over stoping. Nice job, especially for such a short poem.