This was so touchy and so great emotional feelings.
i think you are a great writer, i mean one of the best one here on P&Q

another 5/5 from me...

Hell that was geat. I mean wonderful. Everything came form the heart. Words went straight to my heart soooooo touching. Were did you learn to write so good? I wish that maybe some time way in the future i can write at least half as good as you! Loved it 5/5 form me.

Wow, I think WOW. I absolutely love it, well done! Are you going to write a book cause this is incredible and very powerful entry. I enjoyed reading it, it has superb atmosphere and great imagery.

Wow! Very descriptive and the imagery was amazing.
You really have a talent in creative writing. I can't wait to read more.

5/5

-Shannon <3

Good short little story. Its got great descriptions and paints a good picture..love imagery. The emotion was definitely present as well..Good job!

A smile crept over her face a sparkle shown in her eyes the depth of this world touched her core.
^^^ That doesn't make sense. I suggest you reword it.

I like this entry, although I don't technically like how complex you try to make it. Sometimes, things are best simple, and it seems you tried, when writing this, to get too complex and, yet, it seems, it IS fluent. I don't know how quite you did it.

It made some sense, but it seems as if the description was almost perfect, yet a teensy-little bit too much, with no background information. You don't know about the character, only her emotion. Interesting, but not always the best way to go.
You don't know about why she is feeling what she is feeling, but you know what she's feeling...
I like how at the end, she realizes it was all just a dream, but it seems as if there wasn't enough dreaming, wasn't enough imagination.
It didn't seem to fit.

However, I like how you opened up the setting, as the nobody; When you ended it, that nobody because a somebody. A somebody with dreams. A somebody with emotions, with feelings, with passion and lust.

Well connected, though it could be due for a few revisions, but all in all it was a good short piece.

Good job.

5/5
~Stephen White

Wow.
That was amazing.
You're a really great writer. The imagery was vivid & descriptive, the wording was powerful, && the emotions were strong. Lovely job. :]] 5.5

- Stephanie Lynn .+.

Wow..so beautiful..really touchin..
Loved it

Wow!
this was by far the best thing i have ever read
your words were perfect and i could relate to the emotion within those amazing words
I have to say out of all your poems I’ve read this is simply my favorite
xox
--Jess

Wow, that was great!!! good job and i liked how you say the shadows drowned out the music, very awesome how you put this together. good job! 10/5 lol

W0W THiS iS G00D
Y0U WRiTE VERY WELL
;]
-MiCHELLE
{5/5}
*(C0MMENT BACK)*

This is an amazing piece of art...keep it up.

That was simply amazing! 5/5.

It was amazing!!! A great entry to start a book that i know is going to be great. Keep it up 5/5 form me.

I liked this one. It builds up the emotions and then the reader realizes it's a dream. I enjoyed reading it, it was very creative and original. ^.^ 5/5

Really so touchy n breaking

This was just beautiful! I loved how your words lured me into another world. The vocabulary you used was flawlessly wonderful and the flow was amazing. I am curious to read more if this does become a book. Well done *5/5*

I really amazed with the imagery of this poem. It is very descriptive and well written too. This job worth 5/5!!!

Wow.
[sarcastic voice]
The whole thing was amazing and then you totally dumped it at the end. Lol. I was like holy crap this is beautiful && you end it like that? Jk. Jk.

But it was great and definintly intrigued me. Great job!
5.5

Amber..

Hmm very nice story and great expressing all those words.. all the concept and the structures are very great! i love the whole stanza actually it has a deep meaning and the story was portrayed very well.. great job 5/5