Sad and yet wonderfully written poem. It's, at least to me, much more enjoyable to read now that it's edited. I like your expressions, and the mystique of who you are talking to.

And original, unique poem that, although not too embellished, which you should work on but is not necessary, works perfectly as a statement towards the anti-war/peace movement, or at least, so it seems.

Since I edited it, it seems fine =] The syllabication is wonderful, although I didn't really play around with that at all, and I know where to pause and where to go on =]

In all honesty, I think the only thing I would have said, had I not edited it, would be to correct the punctuation =]

Well done all on your own, m'dear, even without me =]

5/5
~Stephen White

(send me more, i'll get them done =])

Wow.. i dont know what to say. the meaning, the message, its powerful. 55

I really like this one, it holds a lot of emotions and I could felt them like my own. Greatly written, I like every stanza, you should be proud on this one. Excellent job, 5/5

Emotionally vivid.
This poem was very sad, and yet so true, it had tears coming to my eyes.
My heart sped with each word, emphazing there meaning.
It has a lasting impression on the reader, making for an inspirational read.

Excellent job hun:)
--Elly.