I love it

"Fill in the cracks you broke" This is the only line that seems out of place to me. Broke just does not seem to go with fill in the cracks.

My favorite was the last stanza. I like the flow of it and it is completely relatable. Overall I thought you did a really good job and introduced me to yet another format that I have not seen. Nice job. Thanks for entering the contest.

This was so sad. Mostly because I could pretty much relate to it to a tee. Wow, too many "t's" in that sentence. Haha. Anyway, wonderful again. The flow was perfect, and uhh, I just loved it.

This comment is for entering my very drawn
out contest...so thank you VERY much for your entry! :)

Fantastic job doll! I'm pretty sure EVERYONE on this site will agree with me saying that you are an extremely talented writer! Not only do you have amazing feeling in your poetry, and describe things many ppl can't, but you use true forms (e.g. Trijan Refrain, lol) Yeah, I've never even heard of that but you've written a whole freakin' poem using it! Lol! :) But you really are a great poet so keep it up! :)
~Midnight Sun

Love it!!! i enjoyed readiing this 5/5 keep it you are talented love linda

Every time i read one of your poems i wonder how you manage to write so many but still mantain originality in every one. this was amazing. i loved the wording and the darkness it had, you stuck to this tricky structure really well.
loved it

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Great job!! i really like it!