Hey, i really liked the imagery and the sense of invasion (in a nice way) where ou could become so many parts of this persons life... only thing that threw me was the last line... 'not know' i didn't think it would end like that. but really enjoyed it - Gonna flick so more

Very Good Write Hun!

5.5**
<33

This was a cute poem, it droned on a little bit towards the end but that's okay. I thought the chair line was the cutest, and the ending was qiute insightful into how you view the world. Nice work here Jenn.

~Richhieeee

I like the format, you don't see that often.

your servant:
david

:D Jennifer this is excellent!!! Wow! I really think this is one of your best and most unique poems you've written. This is wonderfully penned and the flow was flawless. I think it should be in the friendship category though. I loved the words you used.

"If I could be the chair you sit on
I would know what things you stand for "
^^ That line is brilliant!

You have improved so much since I last read your work.
Excellent job of this. 5/5 because you truly deserve it.

Keep it up && I added you to my faves =)

-Your friend, Shannon <3

Original piece. The metaphors are nice and I ABSOLUTELY loved the lines,

If I could be the chair you sit on
I would know what things you stand for
If I could be a part of your mind

I think your work has improved since I last read it. =)

~ Lainey

[: This was cute. I enjoyed the bit about
the chair, it was very clever. It seemed
to drone on a bit, and the rhythm flew
off a few times for me, but all in all,
a joy to read.

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Wow.
Some of these absolutely amaze me. I can't name them all, but I really enjoyed the.. well, would they be called metaphors, here? Nonetheless, I really enjoyed this. It was unquie, well thought out, well penned, and I could really feel the emotion in it.

Wonderful job, Jennifer. Simply excellent.a

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

(Ps. Don't forget punctuation! It helps the flow <so> much!)

I completely understood this poems.... i really realted to this.... i think that it was written really cute.... i am not sure if they are all metaphors, but i really liked it