I liked the repitition within the poem, it made it mend together a lot better. The flow and your choice of wording was great.

Peace, Joe

That was absolutely beautiful! It was very discriptive and I liked how you repeated the first line in each stanza.

Lol i like the way you've copyrighted it right at the end loool
nice poem though, good repitition of the first line

Like many comments before me. There is nothing I can say that other poets and critiques have not said.

I can tell you that the poem was superb. I love the repetition of the first line nearing to the end of the poem.

It is a very mature, well written poem. Nothing to criticize. You've impressed me dearly.

[Voted 5]

_Sam

The only "bad" part about this poem is the fact that, again, I don't really see the connection between the title and the poem's content. I see some connection actually, but it isn't very clear.
On the other hand, there were a lot of good parts. Good rhyming and flow and good vocabulary.
The repetition of "Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;" was a nice touch. It draws the reader's attention towards it, making them think about why that line is so important.
Overall, good poem!
5/5

Again, simply amazing. Your vocab is always wonderful, and this was so full of emotion and you told a great story. The rhyming was perfect, not forced at all. The reptition of the first line was very effective. Excellent piece. 5/5

Tammie

This is brilliant. I love the repetition and the language you use, it strengthens the poem and intesifies the imagery of the piece.
DnB

I love the repeat in this poem. I works well and flows nicely. =] Good job.

Amazing, so many beautiful metaphors and the repetition of the first line was brilliant. And your choice of words was just perfect. Idea of the whole poem was unique for me.
Very enjoyful read!
5/5 though deserves more!

Really liked this poem. The choosing of words was amazing, the rhyming was good and structure well done. 5/5

This sounds like a song to me. It's great. I loved it!!! 5/5

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Wow this is an excellent poem with great consecutive rhymes and content. I love this type of poems which provoke creativitya nd motivate ppl to write :) 5/5

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Fsams

Wow... this is one of those heart-melting pieces...
Amazing poem, it proves that you are so talented writer. I like everything about this piece: It has superbly created atmosphere, great choice of words, excellently expressed emotions and it is very original.
Marvelous job on this one!
My favorite stanza is;

-Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;
By breaking the only rule of the game of seduction,
It shattered the illusion that I did not care at all --
And slowly started to bring forth my own destruction.-

I can relate to this piece in so many ways.
The repetition of the first line in every stanza is very effective.
Keep writing!

I loved it