It's a good topic, and this poem shows some good basic skills. I think you could become a great poet, but you need a lot of work.
Your wording seems a bit boring to me, not exactly forced, but like you were trying and got the wrong results...
The idea of talking about your friends, the entire topic, its a very intelligent and mature one to cover, so you get points for that. :)
I just don't think your poem is as strong as it could be. I can see places you could brake it, or add in comas, and it'd improve the rhythm a little, and give it a more appealing structure (and thus sound).
Keep writing though, I do think you have the making's of a good poet, and it does seem like a good hobby for you. ^_^
This has all been my opinion, if you disagree with it, it's not my fault. Good luck.