Comments : Why do i feel so broken

  • 12 years ago

    by cory

    I like this poem its very touching. Deep emotions flow under its surface.5/5

    Cory

  • 12 years ago

    by Ken

    I like this bpoem it deep keep up the good work

  • 12 years ago

    by Lisa

    I love this one..great work
    keep it up!
    -Lisa

  • 12 years ago

    by rain

    I like this poem
    keep us the work
    =]

  • 12 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    I REALLY like this poem you did an amazzin job 5/5 <33

  • 12 years ago

    by YourThe ReasonIDiedTonight

    EMOTION..I can feel it flowing in this poem

    it is well written...please keep writing and I will keep reading 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Joshua Grider

    I really enjoyed your poem.. :)
    i gave it a 5/5
    please return the favor

  • 11 years ago

    by MissMeg

    This poem is very touching! great job! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by CrossCut

    This poem has a lot of emotion in it and it flows nicely. i like the idea and how you ran with it.

    Keep up the good work 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Purple

    It's a good topic, and this poem shows some good basic skills. I think you could become a great poet, but you need a lot of work.

    Your wording seems a bit boring to me, not exactly forced, but like you were trying and got the wrong results...

    The idea of talking about your friends, the entire topic, its a very intelligent and mature one to cover, so you get points for that. :)

    I just don't think your poem is as strong as it could be. I can see places you could brake it, or add in comas, and it'd improve the rhythm a little, and give it a more appealing structure (and thus sound).

    Keep writing though, I do think you have the making's of a good poet, and it does seem like a good hobby for you. ^_^

    This has all been my opinion, if you disagree with it, it's not my fault. Good luck.

    2/5