So raw and full of heart.
Good advice from InMyEyez.
Keep your chin up soldier!

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

OMG this is my favorite poem by you!
i feel the emotion, i feel the same way!
I LOVE IT

i love you,
Adriana

First this caught my interest on and your description and wordings somehow touched my heart (i could feel the sadness in it) but i suggest to add a little more imagination and description (though you end it smoothly and nicely) it still made me feel uncontented 'coz i think you still have those ideas but you're holding back of it.. just let it run smoothly.. hmm... in addition, we own our life, we choos to live this way. and so it also means we can change anything we want at any time.. well over all a great poem..

This is beautiful. I mean it. Quick-paced words, but simple and easily-felt. I honestly think it coud be sang. One of those stanzas you can say over and over. But I don't know who'd agree with me. I only felt it form a deeper level. That is, I can relate to it. Including the pace - so I like it :] 5/5